Rogues Resurgence Ch 18.

[KiwiNZ]

We just make it up as we go along now!

It has its advantages not being a native speaker at times ... rarely but every now and again ...

I'll be curious about the chess, Max certainly will get his bottom smacked

[SteveMill]

Great stuff. Noticed a couple of things:

1. Right near the end: "but she could sense not change in it’s tenor or flow so she entered the door code." I think this should be "but she could sense no change"

2. At the very end you have just got "Xel" ?

Cheers

Al

Thanks Al.

The Xel thing was a sign i'd cut off the closing 2 paragraphs - now added back.

[Mercenary]

Good read, looks like this planet side adventure is perhaps longer than you first anticipated

One thing I picked up on a small typo:

“That floaters lack olfactory sensors..."

is that meant to be.

“That floaters lack of factory sensors.

[Moss]

Good read, looks like this planet side adventure is perhaps longer than you first anticipated

One thing I picked up on a small typo:

“That floaters lack olfactory sensors..."

is that meant to be.

“That floaters lack of factory sensors.

The "olfactory" is refering to a sense of smell on the floater, I believe that Max does infact come equiped with his very own olfactory sensors tho but! being in a sewer and talking about floaters does conjure up some other images does it not? and Max brushing his hand through his hair while talking to the hired goons, well, I tried hard to ignore that one, eeww!!!

[SteveMill]

Good read, looks like this planet side adventure is perhaps longer than you first anticipated

One thing I picked up on a small typo:

“That floaters lack olfactory sensors..."

is that meant to be.

“That floaters lack of factory sensors.

No - it's direct speech and follows on from the looking on the bright side bit.

Hadn't clicked on floaters and sewers though.

[Oldman]

I'm grinning like a cheshire cat here....the relationship between Jackson, Max and Xela, like part of a 'chess game' all to itself....

Keep writing and we'll keep reading....I've just GOT to know what finally happens to this 'partnership'....one minute I think I've got it sussed, the next....*shrugs*...I'm back at square one!

Oldman

[SteveMill]

I'm grinning like a cheshire cat here....the relationship between Jackson, Max and Xela, like part of a 'chess game' all to itself....

Keep writing and we'll keep reading....I've just GOT to know what finally happens to this 'partnership'....one minute I think I've got it sussed, the next....*shrugs*...I'm back at square one!

Oldman

I've got a doozie of a cliff-hanger in mind for the end of Resurgence pertaining to this, I'm meandering towards it. Is 110k words book sized?

[SteveMill]

Chapter 18 completed, enough ground-grubbing, it'll be back to gleaming space-ships, laser beams and disproportionate amounts of violence now.

[Al]

Its not all there, just the first couple of paragraphs. Do posts have a character limit that you might have exceeded?

Or is it just me?

Al

[SteveMill]

Its not all there, just the first couple of paragraphs. Do posts have a character limit that you might have exceeded?

Or is it just me?

Al

No, not just you. It's actually lost some of what it displayed before, there seems to be a word limit to threads. i've posted the addition in a new thread.

Steve

[Mercenary]

Is 110k words book sized?

I read somewhere that the average is around 120k words... so close enough